Kires (![[info]](http://www.insanejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif){kind=small} kires) wrote,@ 2002-11-07 05:22:00 |
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Editing and stuff
Re-reading the story I just posted, I see changes that need to be made. Maybe cutting out paragraphs 2-4 entirely would be good, the background information there may not be necessary, but I was trying to illustrate the mindset that would not consider a random beating to be such an unusual occurrance. But perhaps I overdid it. hmmm, the line between clarity and distraction is a fine one, or maybe I'm just not skilled enough. One or the other, maybe.
Re-reading the story I just posted, I see changes that need to be made. Maybe cutting out paragraphs 2-4 entirely would be good, the background information there may not be necessary, but I was trying to illustrate the mindset that would not consider a random beating to be such an unusual occurrance. But perhaps I overdid it. hmmm, the line between clarity and distraction is a fine one, or maybe I'm just not skilled enough. One or the other, maybe.